I have learnt that my writing has improved a lot since the start of the year.
This is an example of my writing now.
The day things started disappearing
One night Piper and Lily were watching a horror movie with their parents at 3am at night. The movie was about things that are starting to disappear. When the movie was finished they had to go to bed straight after because it was very late. Piper and Lily hoped in their beds and went to sleep. In the morning it was cold and Lily woke and saw Piper shaking because she was cold. She had no blanket cover on her. Lily looked all around piper’s bed cause she thought that Piper had kicked it off in her sleep but it was not there. She quickly woke up Piper and said Piper did you kick your blanket off? No, did you take it off? No why would I. Piper shrugged then lily turned back around to her bed but her bed was not in the room. AAAAHHHHHH screamed Lily, where is my bed? It was just there. Piper said maybe this is just a dream. Let’s go down stairs said Lily. Lily and Piper walked down stairs and watched TV. After that they went back up stairs to their room and they saw nothing in there. They both screamed. There is nothing in our room that is not a dream. What do we do said lily. Go down into the basement, said piper. So Lily and Piper went down to the basement and saw a dirty old room. Then the lights turned off. It was pitch black and the piper said LILY you have there eyes said piper. No you do, said Lily. then the lights flicked back on and there was another person there. Lily and Piper ran back up the stairs and called the police. The police ran down to the basement and they looked all around but they couldn't find the stranger so they walked back out of the house and they got back to their job. Lily and Piper were surprised. They walked back down to the basement and they looked everywhere. The stranger came out from under the bed and lily said WHY ARE YOU TAKING OUR STUFF AND HIDING IN THE BASEMENT?!!!!!!. Because I have no place to live and you guys have all the room. Well maybe we could help you find a different home said lily. Ok said the stranger. So Lily and Piper helped the stranger find a new home.
The story is about two twins realising that things are starting to disappear and they are trying to figure it out.The characters are: two twins named Lily and Piper. They are both girls and they both have green eyes and long black hair and their age is 10. Feelings: surprised, scared, crazy.
One night Piper and Lily were watching a horror movie with their parents at 3am at night. The movie was about things that are starting to disappear. When the movie was finished they had to go to bed straight after because it was very late. Piper and Lily hoped in their beds and went to sleep. In the morning it was cold and Lily woke and saw Piper shaking because she was cold. She had no blanket cover on her. Lily looked all around piper’s bed cause she thought that Piper had kicked it off in her sleep but it was not there. She quickly woke up Piper and said Piper did you kick your blanket off? No, did you take it off? No why would I. Piper shrugged then lily turned back around to her bed but her bed was not in the room. AAAAHHHHHH screamed Lily, where is my bed? It was just there. Piper said maybe this is just a dream. Let’s go down stairs said Lily. Lily and Piper walked down stairs and watched TV. After that they went back up stairs to their room and they saw nothing in there. They both screamed. There is nothing in our room that is not a dream. What do we do said lily. Go down into the basement, said piper. So Lily and Piper went down to the basement and saw a dirty old room. Then the lights turned off. It was pitch black and the piper said LILY you have there eyes said piper. No you do, said Lily. then the lights flicked back on and there was another person there. Lily and Piper ran back up the stairs and called the police. The police ran down to the basement and they looked all around but they couldn't find the stranger so they walked back out of the house and they got back to their job. Lily and Piper were surprised. They walked back down to the basement and they looked everywhere. The stranger came out from under the bed and lily said WHY ARE YOU TAKING OUR STUFF AND HIDING IN THE BASEMENT?!!!!!!. Because I have no place to live and you guys have all the room. Well maybe we could help you find a different home said lily. Ok said the stranger. So Lily and Piper helped the stranger find a new home.
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